Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages.

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Happiness index of almost all countries

are decreasing

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is decreasing

day by day and one of the major

reason

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reasons

for the same is

involvement

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the involvement

of people in building their carrier better and better, as

this

involves

great amount

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a great amount

of time and effort,

this

will

definately

without question and beyond doubt

definitely

shorten the way of enjoyment and performing any leisure activity like sports, arts, cooking and may be anything that make the individual happy.

Definately

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Definitely

, as per myself

this

has more disadvantages than advantages. People

nowdays

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now days

are more professional and wants to do their best in achieving their possible standards.

Moreover

, not only

this

they invest their

hardtime

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hard time

in earning more as they link happiness with money. With money one can

definately

without question and beyond doubt

definitely

gain luxury in

life but

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life, but

without fitness or happiness everything seems to be useless.

Society

Suggestion

A society

where we live in demands more on

person's finanacial side

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the person's financial side

person's financial side

and standard of living matters a lot to show your capacity and capability to the people around.Having worked for long hours not only effect the

enzoyment

the pleasure felt when having a good time

enjoyment

time of the person but

also

the health. Sitting long hours on desks

create

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creates

a sense of depression and

stress which

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stress, which

ultimately destruct the health. At the concluding end, I would like to say that people work for living and not living for work and

this

should be the motto of life and one should

beleive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

in balancing the both to live a happy life.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

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230 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

work-life balance
mental well-being
burnout
stress relief
productivity
economic growth
career progression
skill enhancement
quality time
financial security
leisure activities
physical health
personal relationships
stress-related illnesses

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