Many people work long hours, leaving very little  time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages.

Happiness index of almost all countries
are decreasing
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is decreasing
day by day and one of the major
reason
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reasons
for the same is
involvement
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the involvement
of people in building their carrier better and better, as
this
involves
great amount
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a great amount
of time and effort,
this
will
definately
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
shorten the way of enjoyment and performing any leisure activity like sports, arts, cooking and may be anything that make the individual happy.
Definately
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Definitely
, as per myself
this
has more disadvantages than advantages. People
nowdays
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now days
are more professional and wants to do their best in achieving their possible standards.
Moreover
, not only
this
they invest their
hardtime
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hard time
in earning more as they link happiness with money. With money one can
definately
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
gain luxury in
life but
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life, but
without fitness or happiness everything seems to be useless.
Society
Suggestion
A society
where we live in demands more on
person's finanacial side
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the person's financial side
person's financial side
and standard of living matters a lot to show your capacity and capability to the people around.Having worked for long hours not only effect the
enzoyment
the pleasure felt when having a good time
enjoyment
time of the person but
also
the health. Sitting long hours on desks
create
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creates
a sense of depression and
stress which
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stress, which
ultimately destruct the health. At the concluding end, I would like to say that people work for living and not living for work and
this
should be the motto of life and one should
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
in balancing the both to live a happy life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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