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While many people argue that travelling by plane is beneficial for only the affluent class, I still believe that not only wealthy people but also ordinary citizens have merits from it.

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On the one hand, I agree that the upper class
are
Suggestion
is
 more thriving thanks to the advancement of
air
 travel for several reasons.
Firstly
,
air
 flights afford wealthy businessman more opportunities to manage their global chain of companies.
Air
 travelling is known as the most convenient means of
transport which
Accept comma addition
transport, which
 allows travellers to commute to anywhere in the Earth in the short time. As the result, affluent business people can easily arrange their locomotive work,
for example
, arriving in China for the meeting in the morning and returning Canada in the same-day evening for the conference.
Secondly
,
air
 trips associated with
luxurious services
Suggestion
the luxurious services
 and flying-related technology have become the recreation and leisure activities for the rich, which the ordinary people hardly think of owing to its expensiveness.
On the other hand
, not only the up class over the world but
also
 other classes in society are the beneficiaries of flights.
Air
 travel has remarkably promoted local economy.
This
 is evidenced by the fact that when travellers come, they spend much money for accommodation, tourist places and souvenirs which are the main source of income of many ordinary people.
For example
, in the tourist season, some Vietnamese people can earn enough for their whole year by selling Non la and
Ao
indefinite article, "an" is use before a vowel sound, "a" otherwise
a
dai
time for Earth to make a complete rotation on its axis
day
, the traditional costumes of Vietnam, for travellers.
Furthermore
, travelling by aircraft offers employment opportunities to common man. Being hired by travel companies or airlines, ordinary citizens can easily get a suitable job
such
 as cleaner, tourist guide and flying attendant. In conclusion, I believe that to some extent both the affluent and the poor can, more or less, gain a better life from the increase in
air
 flights.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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