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Team activities can teach more skills to individual more than other activities ideally. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#team #activities #skills
Some people argue that
team
 efforts can teach us more skills than individual performance.
However
, I think that both of them have certain benefits and drawbacks and both are equally important in our life.
First
 of all, individual effort gives us a chance to explore each and every area of our goal. We can get immense experience and
also
 can test our skills in different areas. Single handed efforts not only provide vast knowledge and
experience but
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experience, but
also
 point out our weaknesses which may not be visible in
team
 efforts. Without doing individual activities, we cannot identify our strength and limitation.
Furthermore
, it
also
 teaches us
on
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about
 how to give our best performance under tremendous pressure as no one is backing us.
For example
, tigers always live alone and hunt for food individually.
As a
result they
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result, they
 have developed skills
accordingly
 and that made them greatest predators on the earth. On the other side,
team
 efforts provide us a chance to tackle difficult problems in
more effective way
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a more effective way
. Each person gets a chance to work on specific subtask and that helps to explore our specific strength in more depth.
Furthermore
, we always get support from other
team
 members and that gives us a lot of confidence. With effective
team work
cooperative work done by a team (especially when it is effective)
teamwork
, we can solve the toughest problem in less time with even less experience. We can learn different skills from others and same way
also
 gain knowledge of their mistakes.
For example
, lion lives in a group and
shares
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share
 food with others. With proper planning and effective teamwork, they can even hunt an elephant even though the elephant is ten times heavier and larger than
lion
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a lion
the lion
lions
. Overall,
team
 work and individual act both are equally important and we should explore each of these areas to gain enormous knowledge and to get success in our life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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