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Some people think that public libraries are no longer important while others disagree.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #libraries
It is thought by some people that general
book
 rooms are no longer invaluable while others disagree. In my opinion, I agree that general
book
 rooms are no longer imperative. Admittedly, general
book
 rooms are beneficial owing to the discipline and motivation it brings. The library has a Liberian that instills discipline. The Liberian ensures the environment is serene to enable people concentrate on their books. During my high
school
 days, there was a general
book
room
at
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in
 the city centre where my friends and I go to study. The general
book
room
 was sound proofed to prevent sounds entering from the outside. The librarian always made sure we were quiet and not distracted from our books. It motivated my friends and I,
hence
 the need to visit the general
book
room
 to study.
This
 got me the best graduating student award with an outstanding performance. One the other hand, one of the greatest limitations of
general
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the general book room
book
room
 is poor maintenance. The buildings are
delapitated
in deplorable condition
dilapidated
, poorly maintained
with
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by
poor service utility
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the poor service utility
. The environment is littered with dirty due to no supervision. In Benin
city
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City
, Edo state, the central
book
room
 has been abandoned and now used as a
ware house
a storehouse for goods and merchandise
warehouse
.
This
 is due to poor maintenance by the federal government. Unfortunately,
this
 prevented
school
 children from accessing relevant books in the library. Many
school
 children didn't see the need to go to the general
book
room
 to study, rather they devised a new approach by studying in their classrooms after
lecture
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the lecture
. Another point to note is the limited
number
 of general
book
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booking
booked
 rooms. In Benin city, many
school
 children in the rural
community wi
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community, we
community we
community will
 have to travel long distance to access the general
book
room
 owing to the limited
number
 of general
book
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booking
booked
 rooms. In conclusion, while there general
book
 rooms are beneficial, there are a
number
 of limitations like poor maintenance, limited
number
 of general
book
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booking
booked
 rooms.
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