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Some educationalists think that a programme of international exchange visits will offer various benefits for teenage school students. Do you think the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Education means imparting
knowledge
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 to a person and there are vast troves of educational resources today. Some
educationalists
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 uphold the merits of international student
exchange
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 while others have reservation about it. I am
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of
 the view that advantages of it overweigh the disadvantages.
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 essay examines different aspects of
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 issue. On the one hand, there are some drawbacks of
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 programme of international
exchange
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, especially among teenage school students.
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, it may mislead the students. Since teenagers are young and gullible, they are easily attracted by the temptations and easy prey to
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the pitfalls
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, these
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 visits pave the way to adopt different cultures and lifestyles which are not suitable for our customs and values.
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, it can be a financial burden to many students.
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, it is fairly easy to understand the numerous benefits of
exchange
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 visits at international level. Primarily, it helps to improve the
knowledge
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 level.
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is these
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is, these
 international visits are the platforms for students to acquire new
knowledge
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 or information and thereby widen their
education
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educational
 horizons.
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, these programmes provide a wide range of exposure to the teenagers. From
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, they can come to know various students from different countries and they can share their
knowledge
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 and
information
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inform
 each other.
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, they exploit to the wide-spread world.
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, it helps to mingle with others in the society. Students can identify and understand the various cultures, customs and values of different nations and can acquaint with good values from them to upgrade themselves.
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, these programmes help in
molding
the act of creating something by casting it in a mold
moulding
 of personality and reforms them to more independent and self-reliant. To conclude, when we analyse the issue in depth, it becomes crystal clear that
international students
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an international student exchange programme
international student exchange programme
the international student exchange programme
exchange
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 programme has more advantages than disadvantages to school students. We should help and advise the students to exercise their prudence and discernment and
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 can avoid any pitfall.
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