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Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent times there is an increase in the usage of automobile and electric things. People have become very dependent on these goods which have its own advantages and disadvantages
on
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in
of
 human life. In
this
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 essay, I shall discuss about the pros and cons and illustrate on how the advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
To begin
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 with, consumer goods play a very vital role in
people
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peoples'
 life due to their advantages. The main reason is that they have made individuals life easier by saving
lot
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lots
 of
time
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. The things which are done without the use of these things like the automobile or the electrical takes more
time
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 and the energy when compared to doing it with the help of these goods.
For example
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, with the help of the car anyone can travel long distance
with in
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
within
 a short span of
time
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 when compared to going by walk. To add on,
recent study
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a recent study
 at the university of California as shown that there was
30% increase
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a 30 % increase
 in the efficiency of the work, when the people came from a car than by walking.
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, usage of these products has its own disadvantages.
Firstly
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, people have become very lazy because they are saving lots of
time
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.
Secondly
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, while using these products there is a very less physical activity. To illustrate, these days in
markets there
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the markets, there
the markets there
 are many automatic cars available where
person
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personally
 do not even use hands to change the gear. According to
recent survey
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a recent survey
 done by the Times of India newspaper nearly 10% people are obese due to the dependency they have on their cars. In conclusion, even though there are some disadvantages like humans becoming less active and the decrease in their level of the work out they do, advantages
such
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 as getting more
time
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 to do other activities overrides its problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • mass production
  • consumerism
  • economic growth
  • environmental degradation
  • natural resources
  • overconsumption
  • waste management
  • landfill
  • social inequality
  • materialism
  • financial strain
  • mental well-being
  • quality of life
  • job creation
  • productivity
  • pollution
  • deforestation
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