Modern lifestyles mean that many parents have little time for their children. Many children suffer because they do not get as much attention from their parents as children did in the past. Do you agree or disagree?
Modern economy
require
many people to work for many hours. As a consequence, children spend less Suggestion
requires
time
with their parents, a fact that, by some people, lead to depression and anxiaty
among children. (psychiatry) a relatively permanent state of worry and nervousness occurring in a variety of mental disorders, usually accompanied by compulsive behavior or attacks of panic
anxiety
Although
, to some extent, spending less time
with our children may have negative affect
on their education, I do not fully agree with the above statement.
The presence of parents in a Suggestion
a negative effect
negative effect
child
's life is invaluable, and have major affect
on his mental maturity. When a Suggestion
a major effect
major effect
major effects
child
is in the presence of his loving parents, he grow
up in a warm and welcoming Suggestion
grows
environment
, which accept him even when he makes mistakes or react improparly
. Through the use of positive feedback, in an improper way
improperly
such
as saying a good and loving word, or through physical contact like kissess
and hugs, the touch with the lips or press the lips (against someone's mouth or other body part) as an expression of love, greeting, etc.
kisses
child
learn how to respond properly, and increase his confidence. In contrast
, when a child
is not exposed to this
environment
, due to lack of parental support, he looses the ability to learn through positive feedback, and as a consequence, become anxious and afraid.
Despite the above mentioned, I do not think that modern lifestyle leads to substantial suffering among children. The main reason for that, in my opinion, is because if parents spend their remaining free time
focoused
on their children, rather than other things, like television or reading the news, they will be being in focus or brought into focus
focused
abe
to compensate the lost (usually followed by 'to') having the necessary means or skill or know-how or authority to do something
able
time
. For example
, if a parent take
his son playing basketball in the afternoon, and talk to him for an hour about Suggestion
takes
he's
daily activities and interactions, the male possessive pronoun
his
child
will receive the positive environment
he needed, even though he's
father worked until six in the afternoon.
To conclude, changing times require parents to work for longer hours, a fact that male possessive pronoun
his
have
an Suggestion
has
affect
on the a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
child
's environment
. Despite that, I do not feel it leads to increased suffering among children. If parent's will spend their remaining time
focoused
on their being in focus or brought into focus
focused
child
, he will receive the safe environment
to grow into the man he should be.Submitted by chilafp on
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