some people think that money is one of the most essential factors in promoting happiness. do you think people can be happy without much money? what other factors contribute towards happiness?

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Money
is considered by some people as the most important factor to live happily.
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people can live more happily
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life, but
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the difference between developed and developing countries
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the people in developing countries live more happily with strong family bonds.
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there are people who enjoy
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in their work.
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a volunteer doctor feels satisfied and happy by helping the poor and needy people in
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some people get
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by having the loving and caring people around them.
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do their work and after work feels much satisfied by spending their time with
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conclusion
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is not the important factor in life to be happy
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but that can be found through job satisfaction
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family system
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the family system
family systems
and the loving and caring people around us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Promoting happiness
  • Essential factors
  • Financial stability
  • Material wealth
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Contentment
  • Basic needs
  • Maslow's hierarchy of needs
  • Social connections
  • Pursuing passions
  • Well-being
  • Mental health
  • Spiritual practices
  • Personal growth
  • Community service
  • Societal contribution
  • Philanthropy
  • Joy
  • Satisfaction
  • Prosperity
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