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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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In certain countries, people are facing too many
health
 issues due to excessive
consumption
 of fast
food
. Some people are of the view that to bring
this
 in control the government ought to increase the tax on
such
food
 items.
However
, I completely disagree with
this
 view as I feel that imparting
health
 related knowledge to the citizens and banning hazardous
food
 items are the best ways to deal with
this
 problem. Undoubtedly, consuming too much fast
food
 leads to many
health
 related concerns. To tackle
this
, the government has to step in and impart education to the citizens regarding the amount of fast
food
 they can eat and its ill effects rather than imposing higher tax as it will increase the burden on middle class people. To illustrate, in most of the countries about 65% of the population consists of middle class and if the state imposes higher taxes on any
food
 item they will be the most affected lot.
Therefore
 educating people of all classes about the
health
 issues arising out of junk
food
consumption
 is more feasible. Fast
food
 contains certain ingredients which are extremely harmful to the human body.
Such
 ingredients should be banned by the government to deal with the
health
 problems arising out of its
consumption
.
This
 step can eradicate the problem from its root cause.
For example
, Ajinomoto is one
such
 ingredient which is extensively used in fast
food
 preparations.
Health
 specialists consider it as the slow poison to the human body and it
also
 causes cancer.
This
 kind of
food
 substances used in fast
food
 should be put on the banned list.
This
 measure will be more successful than increasing the tax on fast
food
. In conclusion, I firmly believe that imposing taxes will not help much in solving the
health
 issues arising out of excessive
consumption
 of fast
food
 as it will not address the root cause of the issue; rather it would put more economic pressure on poor and middle class sections of the society.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overconsumption
  • Chronic diseases
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Sin tax
  • Subsidize
  • Affordability
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Paternalism
  • Socio-economic disparities
  • Industry lobbying
  • Public health initiatives
  • Consumer behavior
  • Regulatory measures
  • Health-conscious
  • Processed foods
  • Fiscal policy
  • Preventative healthcare
  • Behavioral economics
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