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People wants their countries to host an international sporting events other believes that international sporting events brings more problems than benefits Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some individuals wish that their nation host activity like sport between countries, while another school of thought says
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 inter-countries activity has more disadvantages than advantages. Discussing the view of those who wants the event to hold, the biggest advantage is increased revenue in a short space of time and
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 will in turn generate funds for other public needs of the country.
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 will
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 bring prestige and honour making them be in the limelight of upcoming activities in the future.Cultural blends among the participants from diverse places will be beneficial to athletes who participated
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 there is strengthened political rapport among neighbouring countries afterwards.
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, Brazil after hosting the world cup has gained exceptional growth in all areas of development.
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, for people who says the demerits outweighs the merits are of the opinion that several millions are channelled into international events as which may result to a loss.Many construction and buildings are erected,
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, there are development of games villages and numeral stadiums which will no longer stand any use after the tournament.
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, there is increasing crime rate as different personalities and persons will be present.
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, hotel lodgers will promote prostitution and theft since most people available will desire to explore the community To conclude and give my opinion,
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 will support the latter because it is a thing of prestige and honour to host an international activity like sport as it promotes benefits to the country,
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, governments should be ready to face the challenges that come with it.
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