An increasing trend nowadays is for young adults to play computer games. Some people say this is a negative development. Discuss and give your opinion

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Many young people are interested to play different type of computer games, others are
worry
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worried
about
this
trend
that is
growing.
This
essay will examine both
point
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points
of views and expands my opinion. With growing different type of technologies and improving world facilities, entertainment and games are more various than past. These kind of games are really interesting and attractive. Accessing to them it is not difficult and
everyone with having
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with everyone having
a smartphone or tablet can carry many games with itself
every where
to or in any or all places
everywhere
. Playing
game
in free time and pleasure time can help people to change their moods after a boring or tiredness day. Some of them are very useful and helpful to learn different information from various topics. Naturally
game
helps young adults to be more intelligent and clever. In opposite side, people should control their time.
addiction
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Addiction
to computer games are one of the harmful
trend
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trendiest
that many teenagers are struggling with and their families
are worry
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are worried
are worrying
have worried
about their future.
playing
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Playing
more
game
can affect their
mind and body and cause
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mind, body and cause
mind body and cause
some mental health.
less
used to form the comparative of some adjectives and adverbs
Less
physical activity is another problem among young pupils. In conclusion, to me, computer
game
can be one of the amazing
invention
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inventions
in
this
world but
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world, but
playing too much
game
is really problematic issue.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
we have to know that using from everything can be harmful.
we
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We
should have entertainment as
hobby not
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a hobby, not
a hobby not
lose our life because of
games
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the games
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Addiction
  • Neglect
  • Academic responsibilities
  • Social interactions
  • Physical health
  • Obesity
  • Poor posture
  • Repetitive strain injuries
  • Prolonged periods of inactivity
  • Improper ergonomics
  • Desensitize
  • Real-world violence
  • Aggressive thoughts
  • Cognitive skills
  • Problem-solving
  • Strategic planning
  • Quick decision-making
  • Transferable skills
  • Educational settings
  • Professional settings
  • Social activity
  • Multiplayer games
  • Teamwork
  • Cooperation
  • Communication skills
  • Friendships
  • Escapism
  • Stress relief
  • Unwind
  • Relax
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