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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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At present,
increasing number
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an increasing number
 of tourists are willing to take the risk of exploring destinations with extreme conditions. Even though it can be an adventurous and fulfilling experience which can give them a sense of achievement, it can sometimes prove to be highly dangerous and at times fatal. There are certainly some benefits of visiting extreme places.
One
 might feel proud
at
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of
 what they have been able to achieve which can make them feel positive and adventurous.
For example
, climbing to the top of the Everest requires a lot of will power, stamina and most of all, determination. And the experience of achieving
such
 a feat would be remarkable and would definitely uplift a person’s belief in
one
’s abilities. Having said that, there are several reasons why
one
 has to stay away from visiting
such
 challenging locations. They are mostly remote areas and in
case
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the case
 of health related problems or an injury, it can become very hard to find help or medical facility for treatment. In
one
such
 case, a couple who recently visited a remote park in the USA slipped and fell into a valley,
although
 they were alive for some time after the fatal fall, no
one
 knew that they were there as it was an isolated location and by the time they were traced, they had already passed away. To conclude, it is clear that holidaying
at
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in
 places with challenging settings can sometimes be fun and uplifting.
However
, they
also
 pose a number of dangers worth looking at before deciding whether
one
is fit
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is fitted
fits
 and capable of taking up the trip.
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