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In
this
 present world, the usage of
technology
 is constantly on the rise. Even classrooms are among the many places that enjoy the usage and benefits of
technology
. It is disagreed that
classroom
teachers
 will be totally substituted for
technology
. Analysing the incapability of disciplining
classroom
students
 with
technology
,
as well as
 the limitation in the learning process of
students
 taught with
technology
 will prove
this
.
Firstly
, a robotic teacher made with artificial intelligence would lack sufficient control over its
classroom
students
.
For instance
, it is widely known that kids need to be thoroughly watched by their
teachers
 to be sure that they take their
class
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seriously and do not fool around when classes are going on. Sadly,
this
 is a task robotic
teachers
 will be incapable of carrying out.
Therefore
,
this
 makes it clear that
classroom
teachers
 will never be totally substituted for
technology
.
Secondly
, the learning process of
students
 would be disrupted if they
are
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 taught by robotic
teachers
, which may slow down some
students
’ ability to comprehend information taught in lessons.
For example
, kids love to be motivated before lessons are taught effectively.
This
 is a quality that many human
teachers
 have but robotic
teachers
 do not have.
Thus
 it becomes apparent that human
teachers
 will never be replaced with robotic
teachers
 in a
classroom
. It
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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