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Some people believe that young people should spend their free time with family rather than go to entertainment activities outside the house. Some disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are certain people who
thinks
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think
 that youngsters should spend leisure
time
 with their family
instead
 of going outside for activities which are more exciting.
However others
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However, others
 believe that youngster should go outside for fun. In my opinion, spending quality
time
 with family members and going out with friends both are equally important. On the one hand, family
time
 is itself valuable.
In other words
, there is
lot
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lots
 of interaction occurs between parents and
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
.
This
 will help to build up
strong bond
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a strong bond
 between them.
In addition
 to
this
 many activities like cleaning house, watching movies, listening to old songs with family brings more pleasure and relaxation
particulary
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
particularly
particular
 to those who are staying at hostels.
On the other hand
, outdoor activities with friends is much more exciting. Many individuals move to hilly areas for
treacking
a journey by ox wagon (especially an organized migration by a group of settlers)
trekking
 with their peer groups.
Moreover
, they will go on long drives by riding a bike which they feel more
adventureous
willing to undertake or seeking out new and daring enterprises
adventurous
adventures
 and experience the thrill in life.
In addition
 to
this
 going out with friends provides individual a feeling of freedom as there are no restrictions
from
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for
parents which
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parents, which
 will help them to develop their confidence level. I believe that spending
time
 with family has its own pleasure and importance while passing
time
 with friends is more a matter of fun and thrill. In conclusion, individual has to decide the preference and choice regarding
spending
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Spending
 of their leisure
time
.

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