Sometimes people think that young people should be encouraged to leave their family at certain age, while others think that it is better for them to remain with their families. What is your view.

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Some people believed that youngsters are predisposed to many risks, and
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, should stay back in their homes at all times.
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, others think that they should be supported to leave their families at some time. In my view, growing children should be given opportunity to live away from their homes from about 14 to 15 years. One good reason why young ones should be encouraged to leave their house at some age is the need to become independent.
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could be achieved by registering them in a boarding school where they would live in the school environment under scrutiny with other students. By
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means, they not only become independent, but
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learn how to interact with strangers, thereby improving on both communication and social skills.
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, I could remember that when I was in the college, I relied on my parents for virtually everything,
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as waking up in the morning and washing my clothes, in junior classes because I was a day student, but I became so independent while in senior classes when I moved to live in the boarding room. Another point to consider is that living outside one's house enables young persons to learn other people's way of life.
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, they would have a diversified knowledge and culture. It may
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include good moral behaviours and other skills
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as a style of cooking, prayer and respect.
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, my nephew, John, who was known to be very rude was noticed to have become very obedient after spending 5 weeks holidays in his uncle's place in Abuja. His sudden change was attributed to the attitudes of his cousins whom are known to be calm, humble and respectful. In conclusion,
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people may vary in their opinion, I believe that being independent and having diversified knowledge are very important reasons why youngsters should be motivated to leave their families at about 14 to 15 years sometimes.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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