in some countries the number of shootings increase because many people have guns at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a fact that a number of people are being killed with guns in some places and the shooting rate is rising. Some people think
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is because that they do it due to having their own weapons. I partly agree
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I do not think so. The reason why these murders is not guns. Based on my experience, if people intend to kill someone, they do
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whether to have a gun or not. The weapons are tools to commit crime for them.
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, the weapons are
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, it is true that sometimes shootings are carried out unconsciously,
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statistics on shooting is increasing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gun ownership
  • shootings
  • increase
  • home
  • agree
  • disagree
  • impact
  • widespread
  • access
  • firearms
  • psychological
  • potential
  • statistics
  • examples
  • frequent
  • responsible
  • regulations
  • misuse
  • inequality
  • mental health
  • crime rates
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