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nowadays University education is very expensive some people say that universities should reduce disease especially for less fortunate students of those coming from rural areas to what extent do you agree or disagree with the statements?

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In
this
 modern era,
education
 is crucial for everyone. Some people proclaim that universities charge high fees for students so it should be decreased for those
scohlars
a learned person (especially in the humanities); someone who by long study has gained mastery in one or more disciplines
scholars
 who come from
rural area
Suggestion
a rural area
rural areas
the rural area
 for taking opportunities of
education
. I agree with
this
statement but
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statement, but
 it should be reduced for all the students.
First
 and foremost, in the rural areas there are not proper
education
 for students due to lack of universities and institutes.
Furthermore
, people who live in
village
Suggestion
the village
villages
a village
 earn money by doing
hardwork
Suggestion
the hard work
hard work
 and income of
people
Suggestion
the people
 is less than universities fees.
However
,
student
Suggestion
the student
a student
 has less opportunities of
education
 in rural areas so they come to cities for
education
.
Nevertheless
,
University
Suggestion
the University
 should be
fell
beat for the purpose of cleaning and thickening
full
felt
felt felt
 fees for all
students whether
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students, whether
 they are living in urban areas and rural areas because
education
 is equal for everyone. Though, cities have developed than rural
areas but
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areas, but
 there are
also
 parents who survive in cities and pay
high cost
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the high cost
high costs
 for their children. To put it in a nutshell, after considering
this
 view point. I believe that
university
Suggestion
universities
the university
 should decrease the cost of
education
 for all students not
only rural area
Suggestion
only in rural area
 students.

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