In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages for young people who decide to do this?

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Deciding whether to work
,
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,
travel or go to the University can become a challenge for young people. There are countries which propose working or travelling as an option for people who have just graduated from high school, before they continue their studies
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essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks about
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issue for adolescent people. On the one hand, there are many positive aspects
for
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of
a person to whether have travelled or gained some work experience in his or her early ages. İn terms of experience; İf someone has had some kind of it before he or she consider higher education, it will not only be easier to choose what to study, but it will
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be a grounded decision.
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, someone who has worked as a cashier at a supermarket before and
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opt to study Economics at University, will be more aware of the studies and what to do after graduation, compared to the student who hasn't worked
somewhere
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anywhere
at all.
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drawbacks of taking a break from being a student and trying on other roles in life. A major risk is that these young people won't opt to continue their studies after having roamed around the world or started to earn some money.
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, they compare each experience and might not find University as fascinating as before.
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, in more conservative countries like İndia, students who have graduated high school are competing with each other to start their
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education as soon as possible. İn conclusion, whether a student
choose
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chooses
to take a break before University or not, it will always be the right choice because we all operate in different ways. İn my opinion, it will always be harder to come back to school after a long break. Due to the lack of motivation and concentration.
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, it is always better to finish something you have started before you go on.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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