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Some people say that supermarkets and manufactures have a responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging on the products they sell. Others say that it is the responsibility of consumers to avoid buying products which have a lot of packaging. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Large quantities of plastics are used in various forms in the packaging industry. Some sections of society believe that companies should limit the number of plastics being used while others believe that individuals can make a difference by saying no to goods that require a lot of packaging. In the given paragraphs, I will discuss both the views before giving my opinion. On one hand, manufacturing units should be made aware of the harmful effects of using
packaging material
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the packaging material
 on the environment. Plastic is the leading cause of pollution and the fact that it takes thousands of years to fully degrade in itself explains why its use should be regulated. The world is already witnessing environmental degradation and plastic is undoubtedly a major contributor. The majority of the plastic ends up in the world’s oceans and it has had detrimental effects on marine life. From affecting the ecosystem to being responsible for the extinction of species, we can say that the effects of plastics
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 our environment are anything but positive.
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, consumers should take matters into their own hands and reduce the consumption of products that require more packaging.
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, fewer demands for
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 products will directly result in limited manufacturing and reduced sales. The use of plastics will
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 curtail significantly. Certainly,
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 will not only compel supermarkets and
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industries, but
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 encourage them to make changes in their packaging policy. In conclusion, companies and individuals both are equally responsible for the excessive usage of plastics. Users should be made aware of the catastrophic effects of
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 artificial material while manufacturers must
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 look for suitable alternatives.

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