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Some people think that not only should professional sports and cultural enterprises be sponsored by the government but also that amateur adult and children groups should get funding. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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Over the years, recreational activities
such
 as sports and cultural display have formed important aspects of nation building in many countries. It is perceived by some that the same support given to professional sports and cultural enterprises by the government should be given to inexperienced children and adult groups. For many reasons, the government should not consider
this
 perception. For many decades, sporting and cultural events have contributed significantly to the gross income of a number of countries whereas the amateur groups have only existed with no significant impact on the revenue generated. During events like
olympics
the modern revival of the ancient games held once every 4 years in a selected country
Olympics
,
paralympics
Suggestion
Paralympics
 and premier leagues, people from all walks of life gather together to support their favourite team.
Also
, by
publisizing
the business of drawing public attention to goods and services
publicizing
publicising
 her national fishing festival, New Zealand experienced increase of more than forty percent in her revenue in 2016.
In addition
, inexperienced adult and
children
Suggestion
children's
 groups have absolutely no contribution in promoting unity and nation building. Whereas, cultural activities
promotes
Suggestion
promote
 understanding of different ways of life because
such
ocassions
something you have to do
occasions
actions
 attract a large number of people who live together during the period of the event. In conclusion, while funding the adult and
children
Suggestion
children's
 groups may have its advantage, I strongly believe that there are more important activities the government can fund that will yield more profitable results than investing in these amateur groups.
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