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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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In the contemporary era, there is a heated argument over the issue whether the acceptance of the unsatisfactory conditions is a good idea or trying to improve the situation would be beneficial. A Convincing arguments can be made that accepting the worst circumstances, like an unhappy job or poverty, always teaches an adjustment in the life. People believe that being in
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 situations gives
person strength
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a person strength
, which helps fight with various ups and downs in life.
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, I have been working for 12 hours every day for Google, the technology giant, for the past five years. Though the job is burdensome, I have learned three languages and I am planning to start my own business. On the other side, people assert that it would be more effective to overcome the uncomfortable conditions. If a person refuses to change the unpleasant situations and continues to bear it, she may suffer from poor health.
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, many employees in the sales and marketing sector take immense pressure to increase revenues.
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 results in the highest incidence of heart ailments among these employees. Reducing the work pressure proves beneficial for the employees as well as employers as
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 promotes the former’s health while improving their work productivity. To recapitulate, I would conclude that people argue over whether to adjust
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 bad situations or to find some other way to improve them. In my opinion, trying for the best is a good approach, but to be in
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 conditions where people have to adjust, would give more learning and experience of the life.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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