More and more prisons are being built to house the world’s criminals and many people believe long-term imprisonment is the answer to solving the crime problem. However, others feel that medical and psychological assistance is what is required. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Imprisonment is the solution for the majority of the crimes in the world. While it is true that more and more prisons are being built across many countries, some countries like Norway are revisiting their

punishment

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strategies. Some argue that long-term imprisonment is not the solution for

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problem, but others say that it is because of existing

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, the

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rates are lesser. In

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essay, let's discuss their arguments. Many believe "Modern problems require modern solutions". They argue that

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of pouring in money to build prison facilities, it would be better if mental and medical assistance is provided to the prisoners. It is believed that people commit

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because they are depressed and are affected psychologically, which cannot be cured by simply imprisoning the convict but by giving mental and moral support. There are a few countries that believe in

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and trials were conducted to test these methods and results were satisfactory.

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, another section of people insists that those who commit serious crimes are aware of the consequences and they are not mentally affected. These criminals should be punished in

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a way that, it should act as a

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to others. Their

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criminal is provided medical assistance,

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acts as a loophole and more and more

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suspects will be pitched for

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type of

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. Many

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that people

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perform an act, usually with a negative connotation

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should be isolated and imprisoned for a long time. Having discussed the above

arguements

a fact or assertion offered as evidence that something is true

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, I believe the

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should depend on the analysis of

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the convict

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was committed,

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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More and more prisons are being built to house the world’s criminals and many people believe long-term imprisonment is the answer to solving the crime problem. However, others feel that medical and psychological assistance is what is required. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Some students take one year off between finishing school and going to university, in order to travel or to work. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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People say it is the responsibility of the residents to keep the environment clean and tidy while others think it is the government's responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion with examples.