More and more prisons are being built to house the world’s criminals and many people believe long-term imprisonment is the answer to solving the crime problem. However, others feel that medical and psychological assistance is what is required. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Imprisonment is the solution for the majority of the crimes in the world. While it is true that more and more prisons are being built across many countries, some countries like Norway are revisiting their
punishment
strategies. Some argue that long-term imprisonment is not the solution for
crime
problem, but others say that it is because of existing
punishment
, the
crime
rates are lesser. In
this
essay, let's discuss their arguments. Many believe "Modern problems require modern solutions". They argue that
instead
of pouring in money to build prison facilities, it would be better if mental and medical assistance is provided to the prisoners. It is believed that people commit
crime
because they are depressed and are affected psychologically, which cannot be cured by simply imprisoning the convict but by giving mental and moral support. There are a few countries that believe in
this
and trials were conducted to test these methods and results were satisfactory.
However
, another section of people insists that those who commit serious crimes are aware of the consequences and they are not mentally affected. These criminals should be punished in
such
a way that, it should act as a
detterence
a negative motivational influence
deterrence
deterrent
to others. Their
arguement
a fact or assertion offered as evidence that something is true
argument
is that if
such
criminal is provided medical assistance,
this
acts as a loophole and more and more
such
suspects will be pitched for
this
type of
punishment
. Many
opinionates
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinions
that people
commiting
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
committing
commenting
commuting
serious
crime
should be isolated and imprisoned for a long time. Having discussed the above
arguements
a fact or assertion offered as evidence that something is true
arguments
, I believe the
punishment
should depend on the analysis of
convict
Suggestion
the convict
convicts
, the reason due to which the
crime
was committed,
criminal's
Suggestion
criminal
behaviour and others. We should be open to
such
ideas but
Accept comma addition
ideas, but
they should be evaluated properly before implementation.
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