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Advertising discourages us from being different individuals by making us all want to be and look the same as each other. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Advertising plays a vital role in influencing individuals. Effective advertising leads to building an image which can be related to a number of individuals. Some people are in agreement that the adverse effects of advertising could lead to losing the individuality of people. In my view, I agree that advertising effects can have detrimental effects on a person's individuality,
however
 there are
also
 some positive aspects.
To begin
 with, advertising can influence people easily which can lead to losing their individual identity. The fashion industry has evolved over the recent years, the people now adapt easily to the new fashions
that is
 being advertised over the media which, helps them to be up-to-date with the latest fashion. The fashion, they are influenced by could possibly be very different to their identity.
In addition
, advertising could help in losing the perspective people have. As advertising builds a certain perspective people, tend to stop having a say in their point of view. They only follow the trend,
this
 could lead to setting an adverse effect in the society. As it is always beneficial to have a society with different views.
Moreover
, advertising
also
 builds a materialistic world.
For example
, having the greatest device has become a societal norm. Advertising of these gadgets on all forms of media, encourages the want of having these products. Individuals get influenced to buy these products so they can fit into the society.
On the other hand
, advertising helps in creating understanding among individuals. As it influences the choices of individuals, people could be influential in positive ways as well.
For example
, the youth can be influenced by reducing the among of alcohol consumption if the same is being advertised with the adverse effects it causes to health. In conclusion, advertising plays a vital role in keeping up with the trends in the market. In my view, advertising can easily influence, especially the youth with can have adverse effects
such
 as losing of individuality etc.
Hence
, it is important for the advertising medium to be used effectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homogenize
  • consumer preferences
  • fashion trends
  • lifestyle choices
  • individual uniqueness
  • persuasive techniques
  • celebrity endorsements
  • ideals
  • emulate
  • personal identity
  • diversity
  • social media
  • curated images
  • standardized
  • societal values
  • niche marketing
  • counter-culture movements
  • indie brands
  • mainstream
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