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People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kinds of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest?

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The notion of doing things differently, is most likely to be prevented by a number of people.
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 resistance is capable of creating some negative effects, that could cause some problems in the lives of people. There is a popular saying that states, 'doing the same thing and expecting a different result
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 stupidity'. In
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 regard, the refusal to make changes could cause the following issues:
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, there is a likelihood that friends and family could stop suggesting changes.
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,
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 could destroy friendships and families.
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, doing the same things and expecting the same result, may prevent some people from fulfilling their lifelong career goals, thereby, causing depressing and leading to having suicidal thoughts.
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, it is possible that the refusal to make changes could affect the career of some people.
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, when an
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 makes the same mistakes regularly and refuses to heed to correction, the employer would have no other choice than to terminate the appointment of the employment.
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 is most likely the case when the attitude of an employee affects the reputation of the company or business entity. In view of the
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, it is in my opinion that some mistakes can be made.
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, refusing to heed to correct is a major issue. Against
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 background, I recommend that people should sieve opinion and inculcate positive changes.
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 all changes are not recommended, especially changes that will negatively affect the lives and career of a group of persons.
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