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Task 2: Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 day and age,
instead
 of concentrating on positive
information
, people tend to problems posted on social media. It is argued that the negative
information
 exerts adverse effects on people and society. While I concur with the viewpoint, I think that the problems would alert citizens to avoid them. On the one hand, there are several rationales why some individuals consider that negative
information
 would jeopardize society. The evidence is that the mentality of people is affected by negative thoughts, since people are able to be afraid of the
information
 which may occur to them in the future.
For example
, there was a video, in relation to a traffic accident posted on Facebook, which attracted millions of views;
as a result
, viewers are likely to concerned about being
next
 victims, should they walk on the street on the
next
 day.
On the other hand
, I think that the negative reports could bring benefits
for
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to
 people and society. It is undeniable that the problems
on
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of
with
 social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
 are able to be an alert to citizens. It is a fact that people may become more careful after knowing problems.
For instance
, because of careless of a mother in keeping her eyes on her son, the child has a broken
legs
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leg
 after trying to go down a stair.
This
 report may help parents to take care of their children carefully so as to avoid the same accident. In conclusion,
although
 the problems on the internet could have
negative impact
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a negative impact
 on
inhabitants
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the inhabitants
, I believe that by virtue of the troubles, individuals could avoid them. (261 words)
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