In many contries, people have health problems because they choose to live in unhealthy ways. What do you think the reasons for this? How can it be solved?

Most of the people select to live a
life
full of stress that
give
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gives
rise to serious
health
issues in numerous nations. Consumption of fast food and lack of exercises
are quoted
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is quoted
as important reasons for
such
health
problems.
However
, physical activity and proper diet help to overcome
this difficulties
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these difficulties
this difficulty
. One of the prime
reason
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reasons
is that people
desires
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desire
to live a lavish and
mordern
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
life
. To
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
this
dream they incline more towards fast food eating.
In other words
, people eat outside food which contains a large amount of cholesterol responsible for causing serious diseases like
heartattack
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heart attack
.
For instance
, eating butter,
cheese etc
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cheese, etc.
cheese etc.
contains high amount of
fat which
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fat, which
is harmful for body. Another reason is lack of
exercise
. People do not get enough time to do
exercise
because of increase workload and busy job schedule.
Moreover
,
instead
of walking they prefer to commute by car and two wheelers so that they can reach at their work on proper time.
This
results
into
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in
absence
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the absence
of physical activity and ultimately people suffer from various difficulties regarding
health
. One of the obvious remedy
is avoid
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is avoiding
has avoided
is to avoid
eating outside meal.
In addition
, people must eat healthy and nutritious diet.
For example
, fruits, green leafy vegetables, pulses
etc which
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etc., which
etc. which
contains
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contain
more of vitamins and
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more vitamins and
minerals and less fatty substance.
Furthermore
, it is advisable for pupils
to do
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do
regular physical activity in form of
exercise
, yoga,
pranayam
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Pranayam
, walking etc. Physical
exercise
not only keep the person active and fit but
also
reduces stress of work and hectic
life
. In conclusion, though modern lifestyle and luxury may indulge people to live
a
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an
unhealthy
life
that creates serious
health
issues but
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issues, but
proper nutritious diet and
exercise
plays a vital role to nullify
this problems
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this problem
these problems
.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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