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Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Infrastructure and internal strength and well being
both
 forms the actual economy of a country.
Although
, various people believe that external infrastructure and designer buildings are important for a
city
 to look good while others think internal factors like better education and better medical services are important. As per my opinion, I am strongly in favour of
both
 the above points and I will discuss
both
 these factors in detail with examples. Talking about schools and hospitals
,
Accept space
,
for sure these facilities
although
 these are not only facilities, but a basic necessity for a
city
 to grow and its citizens to live happy and progressive life. Having educated citizens will help the
city
 to grow in the long run and helps in reducing social evils like crime, rape, murder, burglary and in fact become a part of its growing economy.
For instance
, in a country like India, the government is spending lots of money in educating the youth especially girls.Schemes like a midday meal to attract students. Hospitals with other hand, is the need rather than a luxury for people, especially for general people who cannot afford to go out of their town or
city
 for treatments, that should be available within the
city
 and government should invest in upgrading and opening new hospitals. Not only providing new hospitals, but
also
 making the service cheap is the duty of any government. Now, talking about beautifying and creating a good outer structure of big buildings of the
city
 is as important as its internal factors. Good infrastructure attracts investment and tourism and
finally
 the business and economy of the
city
 better. At
last
, according to my viewpoint
both
 impressive buildings and internal schools and hospitals,
both
 are important for a
city
 to develop better and make its citizens happy.
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