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Some companies have uniforms for their staff which must be worn at all times. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion.

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Many corporations have restricted their employees to wear a
uniform
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 during working hours. While uniforms may hinder the uniqueness of an individual, I believe that these are imperative for the safety of workers. The primary advantage of
uniform
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 is to protect staff from a hazardous situation.
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 is to say because many industries have installed heavy machinery for manufacturing of their products, and wearing loose clothing or
jewelry
an adornment (as a bracelet or ring or necklace) made of precious metals and set with gems (or imitation gems)
jewellery
 may jeopardize their lives by getting stuck in these machines.
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, in Russia, it was reported in 2018, in
Daily Times
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the Daily Times
 that two factory workers lost their lives due to an outfit they were wearing during batch manufacturing and cloth stuff catch fire and burnt them to death. I believe that making
uniform
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 an obligation for employees
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 benefit in terms of personal safety. Every individual has a desire to look different than others and it is a part of human nature. While making
uniform
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 a compulsion may restrict an individual’s identity, because every person has their own way of carrying cloths which makes them unique among others.
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, most staff do not like to wear the
uniform
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 provided by the company as it results in affecting their appearance.
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, a survey report was published in a newspaper about making
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 compulsory and 75% of workers denied to wear a
uniform
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.
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, I believe that at workplace human safety is more important rather than focusing on
individuals appearance
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the individual's appearance
individual's appearance
individual appearance
. To conclude, employees of many departments are now obliged to have the same attire
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in
 the workplace,
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 having the same costume reduces
specialty
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Specialty
speciality
 of an individual,
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 act would save staff members from getting into trouble.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • uniforms
  • staff
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • promotes
  • belonging
  • team spirit
  • professional
  • cohesive
  • image
  • security
  • identification
  • reduces
  • expenses
  • employees
  • decide
  • wear
  • fosters
  • equality
  • minimizes
  • differences
  • individuality
  • self-expression
  • uncomfortable
  • restrictive
  • body types
  • sizes
  • maintenance
  • cleanliness
  • control
  • restriction
  • personal style
  • fashion preferences
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