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In many countries, as people are earning more these days they are also spending money in buying more and more items. Do you think it is a positive or negative development

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The rising level of people's income is being increasingly witnessed in many nations.
As a result
, people tend to buy more products compared to the past. In
this
 essay I will discuss why
this
 trend is largely a positive development even though there are few inevitable drawbacks. There are numerous compelling reasons why
this
 tendency is beneficial to the public and prominent one is that buying more necessary life goods can improve people's living conditions as it enables people to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their life satisfaction and increased life expectancy more easily and effectively.
In addition
 to
this
, the economy will benefit a lot
from
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of
 pupils consuming more money because it can stimulate the economic growth. A recent survey conducted in Japan revealed that the
consumers
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consumer
consumer's
 culture plays a crucial role in the
economy
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economic
 development of the country. These advantages have
profound impact
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a profound impact
 on the society. On the flip side of the coin, there are some nasty consequences as well.
Firstly
, spending
lot
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lots
 of money can lead to over consumption of the products and a rapidly growing amount of rubbish in the public because people are encouraged by various manufacturers and advertisements to buy more and more products that they do not read and
then
 just throw
th
definite article
the
 away a while. To
examplify
be characteristic of
exemplify
, I am planning to buy the newest smart phone in order to keep up the trend. As can be
seen our
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seen, our
 society could be adversely impacted by
this
 trend as well. To sum up. People like to spend more money on purchasing a wide range of products because they are having
higher salary
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a higher salary
 than the past. Taking everything into consideration, I am inclined to say that the positive aspects of
such
 development surpass the negative points.
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