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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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Test 14-1 People are different in their reaction
toward
Suggestion
to
 situations in their lives. While there are some people whole would accept an adverse situation as their reality and live with it, others would fight to change it. In
this
 essay, we are going to
disucss
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
 the two
group
Suggestion
groups
 of people and their attitude toward changing their profession before a conclusion is made. On the one hand, there are some people who hesitate to make a decision to change their
job
.
This
 could be due to the fear of unemployment and the lack of financial sources.
For example
 a student who graduated from the faculty of accounting who could not find a
job
 as an accountant and decided to
work
temporary
Suggestion
temporarily
 as a call
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 agent to meet his financial needs.He will not be satisfied with his
job
 as it does not meet his ambitious career, yet he can not take the initiative and resign to start pursuing his career so he decided to abandon his dreams. As it
is showing
Suggestion
is shown
, people can accept the fact to
work
 undesirable jobs to support themselves.
Thus
, they will try to live with it and accept it as their reality.
On the other hand
, some people will struggle toward achieving their goals and obtaining their dream
job
.
for
Suggestion
For
 instance
,
Accept space
,
 a
frech
recently made, produced, or harvested
fresh
French
 graduate accountant who found it difficult to
work
 in his career due to the high competition, so he
decidecd
recognizable; marked
decided
 to
work
 as a part timer. Meanwhile, He
purused
a person who is being chased
pursued
 a
further
studies
Suggestion
study
 to obtain
diploma
Suggestion
a diploma
 in the accounting to excel his abilities in the accounting. He did not accept to leave his dreams behind and he tried to improve his academic records to obtain his dream
job
. Personally, I believe that people should not let external factors confine them in a situation that they do not accept. We should
work
 hard to improve our current situation, no matter how long does it take, we can do it.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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