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Money Can Make Life Easier And More Comfortable. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the present world,
money
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 makes a prominent role
on
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in
 part of the human
life
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. Few people believed that all the rich people are enjoying their
life
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 with
an
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a
 great
luxery
something that is an indulgence rather than a necessity
luxury
 and
lavish
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lavishness
. But, in my opinion, I strongly disagree that there are so many things to be necessary in part of
life
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 to make a happy. In
this
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 essay, I will illustrate with probable reasons to elaborate
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.
Firstly
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, peace of mind is much needed for us on both at personal and professional
life
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. Even if we had
a
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an
 amount of currency, it
wont
will not
won't
 help us to avoid the personal tensions and worries.
Secondly
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, being a healthy is
also
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 plays
a
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an
 important in our daily cycle.
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, we have to maintain good relationship with family and friends. When we face any problem, there is no matter if we have enough
money
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 without having great well wishers to support us.
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, in a modern era,
money
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 is
inter linked
be interwoven or interconnected
interlinked
 on every human’s need. It gives us all
luxery
something that is an indulgence rather than a necessity
luxury
 and comfort
life
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.
To
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Too
Two
 grown up as a
walthy
having an abundant supply of money or possessions of value
wealthy
worthy
healthy
 and
prospurus
in fortunate circumstances financially; moderately rich
prosperous
life
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, it is mandatory.
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, it makes to a respect
on
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for
 that person in a society.
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, the people who are rich will have
power
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the power
 to rule the world. In conclusion, I would like to say that there is no limit to earn the
money
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. But, people are so
passionated
having or expressing strong emotions
passionate
 to increase their revenue in terms of assets. Ultimately, it gives a happy at some extent to buy a basic needs. After that, healthy and
prosperus
in fortunate circumstances financially; moderately rich
prosperous
life
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 with a beautiful family is matters.

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