People nowadays sleep less than they used to in the past. What do you think is the reason behind this? What are the effects on individuals and people around them?

Scientifically it has been proved that we need to take
rest
around 7-8hours minimum per day. But due to competition in
this
century
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
people are in rush hour so that they are not getting enough
time
for
rest
, which directly have
negative impact
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a negative impact
in
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on
health. When a child
don't get
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doesn't get
enough
rest
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rest, then
then
they
shows
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show
irritation
likewise
we feel discomfort and can't be oriented in our work.
However they
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However, they
try to give their best, somewhere they can
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
their focus. There can be
disbalance
in their daily
life
and to their work. Several websites
also
are impacting disadvantages to our daily
life
. People are more interested in other
life
than their own, there is no
time
for family and close one. They think they spend more
time
for
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in
their office and remaining
time
for their refreshment and become addicted to several networks. In my opinion peaceful
rest
and sleep directly affect in behaviour of individuals. They can concentrate
in
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on
their
pesonal
concerning or affecting a particular person or his or her private life and personality
personal
and work
life
together.

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