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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the proportion of
households
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 in owned and rented
accommodation
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 in two countries ( England and Wales) between 1981 and 2011.
Overall
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, the
percentage
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 of
households
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 in rented
accommodation
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 was higher than the
percentage
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 of
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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 over that period.
In addition
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, the highest
percentage
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 of
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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 was in 2001 whilst the
percentage
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 of
households
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 in rented
accommodation
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 was the lowest.
On the other hand
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, the biggest
percentage
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 of
households
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 in rented
accommodation
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 was in 1918
while
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 the
percentage
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 of
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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 was the smallest.
Furthermore
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,
households
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 in owned and rented
accommodation
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 had the same
percentage
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 in 1971. In terms of the
percentage
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 of
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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, it was around 23% in 1981.
Then
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, it increased to
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around 32% in 1939 and 1953.It considerably increased from 1939 to 2001 (about 32% and 69% respectively).
However
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, it slightly decreased to
be
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around 64% in 2011. The year 1980 didn't only witness the lowest
percentage
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 of
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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, but it
also
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 witnessed the highest
percentage
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 of
households
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 in rented
accommodation
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 that
it
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 was around 86%. It slightly decreased to have the same value (around 68%) in 1939 and 1953. It significantly decreased from around 68% to 31% from 1953 to 2001 . After that, it increased a little to
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apply
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around 36% in 2011.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, accommodation, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 10 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • households
  • accommodation
  • owned
  • rented
  • prevalent
  • transition period
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • analyze
  • summarize
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