People should follow the custom and tradition when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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The lot

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Lite

is irrefutable that, more and more people migrate from one

country

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to another.

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, a certain segment of the society

believe

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believes

that

masses

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the masses

should adopt the custom and traditions of that particular

country

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where they want to live. I endorse the statement to a large extent. I have some solid grounds to defend my

opinion which

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opinion, which

I would like to explicate it at length in the paragraphs to come.

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with, individuals should learn all the rituals because if they

not follow

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don't follow

aren't following

then

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they may face various problems.

Firstly

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, it is difficulties for new residents who do not understand the rules and regulations of

host

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the host country

country

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, when people want to start their own business they have to know

local business custom

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the local business custom

in order to be successful.

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, some actions will be illegal in the host

country

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and will make local people angry.

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, some countries well famous countries for the clean, if new individuals throw the trash on the

street they

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street, they

will be punished and have to pay the fees. So it is the

beneficial

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most beneficial

benefit

for new residents to know about each and everything about that particular

country

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On the other hand

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, there are a lot of benefits of following local customs and traditions.

First

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of all, it is easy to make friends when new comers understand local customs and traditions.

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, new immigrants will enjoy the traditions and able to take part in community life.

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, they can participate in festivals with new friends when they have mutual understanding. Apart from it, they never have to

paid

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pay

their hard earned money as a punishment if they have knowledge about rules and regulations. To conclude, to make their life easier masses should study the customs and traditions before migration

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so that they never face any trouble in their life in the host

country

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. I agree with you.Yes, I agree.I don't agree.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

316 words

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People should follow the custom and tradition when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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