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Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion?

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Gender
 equality has always been the main concern of the world for ages. Now days most of the people are getting modern in their approach towards
this
 evil of society and learning to respect both the
gender
.
Although
, few people are their living in many backward parts of the world who believe just the opposite, they consider one
gender
 superior to another. Talking about the jobs relevant for one particular
gender
 is made for the benefit of society. I am in favour of
gender
 equality, but I
also
 believe there are certain jobs which are not meant for women and will explain the same in
later part
Suggestion
later parts
a later part
. Certain risk related jobs like working in a coal mine or a factory having hazardous processes and other
such
 jobs are risking and dangerous for women to do and
also
 the ones which involves physical strength.
Although
, there are many other jobs which earlier are not done by women
,
Accept space
,
but now with the change in technology and thinking women are doing and excelling
also
.
For instance
, himanagement jobs
Moreover
, along with that there are many jobs which are not supposed to be done by men and women are good at them like
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