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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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The issue of whether a
country
 will benefit from a relatively large number of young adults is really complex. Some people might think that young people are more energetic and contribute higher GDP of the
country
, while others might believe that older people with more experience can provide wise advises to others.
This
 essay outlines two aspects to show
way
the cause or intention underlying an action or situation, especially in the phrase 'the whys and wherefores'
why
 a larger number of young adults
brings
Suggestion
bring
 more advantages than disadvantages.
To begin
 with,
although
 the elder may have more experiences and can share some wise advices to people, their experiences may not so useful in the modern society.
For example
, older people who were born much earlier before the technology revolution could not share how to use social media
such
 as “FB” or “Instagram”.
In addition
, because younger individual
usually have
Suggestion
usually has
 more innovative ideas than the older individual, it is crucial to invent better product and create new business model.
Therefore
, a
country
 with more young adults can build a more creative society.
Furthermore
, a population with
relatively large number
Suggestion
a relatively large number
 of young adults can contribute higher GDP growth.
First
, more young adults mean more people can joint
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 market and increase national income.
Second
, old people who are retired normally live by spending their
saving
Suggestion
savings
;
however
, it will not contribute the productivity of the
country
.
Thus
, the national
economics
Suggestion
economy
 will benefit from the population with
higher proportion
Suggestion
a higher proportion
 of young adults. To sum up, in my opinion, the advantage of the situation
outweigh
Suggestion
outweighs
 the disadvantage because young adults compose a more innovative society and create a powerful economics.
Submitted by john liu on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
  • social welfare
  • unrest
  • instability
  • healthcare
  • elderly care
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