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Technology has positive or negative impact on the relationshipe

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In recent years, one of the highly controversial issues relates, whether
technology
 has a valuable impact on the relationship or it makes it worse.
This
 essay discusses
this
 argument and shed some light on its effect on human's lifetime and expands my idea. Recently, much more information has become available on the role of
technology
 on the relationship that has emphasized on how we can control our
life
 with
this
 development without any harmful influence on people.
First
 of all, in
this
 century,
technology
 is a part of people's
life
 and they bind
togather
in contact with each other or in proximity
together
. Different social media, Facebook, Instagram, WhatsApp and
Tuwiter
a series of chirps
Twitter
for instance
, have
huge influence
Suggestion
a huge influence
 on the friendship,
specialy
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
on
Suggestion
in
for
with
to
 teenagers, as they are
verey
used as an intensifier
very
 curious to find some new friends from every part of the world and have a communication with them to expand their
knowleges
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledges
 about different countries and their cultures.The other significant impact of
technology
 is that makes easier chat and call for people, specifically for students who are studying in other
citys
a large and densely populated urban area; may include several independent administrative districts
cities
 or countries, so they can easily have voice or video call with their families and old friends.
On the other hand
, using the social media and just listening and following various part of their news, or having chat with some strangers can cause
negative affect
Suggestion
negative effects
negative effect
a negative effect
 on human's lifetime. The other important harmful influence that makes parents really worry is, their children
instead
 of spending their time with family and real pupils, spend most of their
life
 on the net to finding new friends and followers.
However
, they do not have any understanding and information about them. Generally,
therefore
, it seems that, every new thing brings both
side
Suggestion
sides
 with
itselfe
the thing named or in question
it
itself
.
people
Suggestion
People
 have to know how they can use it to be useful. In conclusion, in my opinion,
technology
 helps our
life
 to be more convenient and enjoyable. It would be better if we manage our time for
useing
an act that exploits or victimizes someone (treats them unfairly)
using
 it correctly.
definitely
Suggestion
Definitely
 it can give us more happiness and delightful.
Submitted by Farzaneh on

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