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Some countries are struggling with an increase in the rate of crime. Many people think that having more police on the streets is the only way to reduce these increasing levels of crime. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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It is true that the
criminal
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crime
 rate in many nations has been a significant issue. While I argue that increasing in the number of
police
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 is a good idea, I
also
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 believe that there are various ways to deal with the situation. At the outset, there is a common belief that if authorities allocate more
police
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 to areas where the rate of offenders is high, the security status in those places
will probably be keep
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will probably be kept
 stability.
Firstly
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, a primary reason why criminals can fulfil illegal activities is a lack of strict surveillance. By
rising
increasing in quantity or value
raising
 the quantity of
police
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, more violent activities are likely to be prevented from the beginning.
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, the increasing in the presence of
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 on the streets would enable residents to report when they see the risk of crimes tend to occur in order to deter crimes. In case that security forces are far from residential areas, citizens take a long time to report a crime.
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, the timely intervention of
police
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 would be too late, which leads to adverse consequences. Despite of
above arguments
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the above arguments
, I am of the opinion that there are many ways to decrease the level of crime. One of effective methods is that governments can apply the technology. By installing CCTV systems, the streets will be put under control twenty four hours per day.
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, there is no need for the presence of security forces. What other solutions which authorities could perform to tackle criminal issues is to keep the society out of disorder by developing the economy. When a huge number of
job
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jobs
 are created, the unemployment rate, which is one of main reason leading to the growth of crimes,
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 more likely to reduce.
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, people force on working to fulfil what they desire without committing crimes. In conclusion,
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 extending more
police
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 on the roads is a good way to address crimes, it seems to me that alternative methods would be possible solutions.
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