Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In
era
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an era
the era
of economical crisis disappointing regarding
job
and shortage of financial
assest
anything of material value or usefulness that is owned by a person or company
assets
asset
assist
is now common.Some people think that it is better to accept
such
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Such
scenario and other opine that doing effort is
only way
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the only way
for
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to
better condition.I shall discuss both view and give my point of view regarding
this
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prepare and issue for public distribution or sale
issue
.
To begin
with
,
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,
major reason
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the major reason
behind unsatisfactory
to
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for
job
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a job
the job
jobs
is lower pay for
work
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the work
.In
devloping
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
developing
contries people
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countries, people
countries people
often work with
lower paymnet
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lower payments
lower payment
a lower payment
,
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,
such
scenario
rise
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arises
arise
unstatification
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Unstatification
to
job
.
Secondly
,
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,
competition
play
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plays
also
huge role.There is
tought
not given to gentleness or sentimentality
tough
competition between employees so some time employees are not able to handle
such
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Such
pressure and
felling
the experiencing of affective and emotional states
feeling
of
disappointmnet
a feeling of dissatisfaction that results when your expectations are not realized
disappointment
disappointments
is
rise
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rising
risen
.
Moreover
,
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,
some time internal
confict
an open clash between two opposing groups (or individuals)
conflict
is
also
behind
such
condition and due to
confict
an open clash between two opposing groups (or individuals)
conflict
employees or worker
do
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Do
not manage good
relation
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relationships
with their boss and
collegeus
an associate that one works with
colleagues
college us
.
Furthermore
,
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,
nowadays there are more and more
job
-seekers.
For
example companies
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example, companies
get hundreds of
application
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applications
for one vacancy so majority of
population
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the population
is unemployed
and
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And
they are suffering to financial shortage. On
other side
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the other side
,
Accept space
,
some people think that we have to do something for improvement
such
situation.In days of
competiton employers
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competition, employers
competition employers
competitions employers
havr
have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense
have
to able keep healthy environment,
for
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For
good
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best
performance they can give reward to
best employee
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the best employee
so
feeling
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the feeling
of disappointment would not rise
,
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,
companies can give
job
security and they should have
give
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given
proper
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Proper
salary to deserving candidate.
Next
,
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,
government
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the government
can do
lot
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a lot
for
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of
finacial
involving financial matters
financial
crisis
,
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,
they can provide employment to youth if everyone
have
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has
job
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a job
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
chances of
suffering
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Suffering
from money shortage will reduce.
In addition
,
Accept space
,
some employees think that they are overqualified for
job
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the job
a job
jobs
so they do not get
job
opportunities. To sum up
,
Accept space
,
in my opinion best way to survive
this
situation is
make
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making
some effort
for
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to
better condition.Government
,
Accept space
,
job
provider and higher authorities of companies
shoild
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
sold
help a lot.

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