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Dogs are one of the most popular pets in the world, yet many would, yet many would say it is inappropriate to have them in built-up inner-city areas? Do you agree or disagree?

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Nurturing animals in
house
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the house
is
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are
 one of the civilian’s pleasure in their hectic life, which became their psychological therapy of their work issues when getting
home
. The
piority
an organization to gain political power
party
priority
parity
 suppose that living
in
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at
home
 is better for their health and their
safty
the state of being certain that adverse effects will not be caused by some agent under defined conditions
safety
.
In
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On
By
 the contradictory way, most people said that these
speices
(biology) taxonomic group whose members can interbreed
species
spices
speeches
 is
envolved
connected by participation or association or use
involved
 suitable for the wild environment, so they deserve to be outside. In my point of view, I agree both of view. Thousands
year
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years
 ago, all of
speices
(biology) taxonomic group whose members can interbreed
species
 living in a same habitat,
in other
words we
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words, we
 are equally so I suppose that living together under the roof is absolutely normal.
This
 is a win-win relationship, people need a friend to
detachment
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detach
 the loneliness and they work and supply their pet food so they must get the responsibility for their pet. According to the instincts of dogs, they always wander around so their owner suppose that their
dog
 will be
safty
yielding readily to pressure or weight
soft
 when they around
home
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the home
, in their visible vision.
In addition
, the urban area with a limited housing space, their
dog
 can be disoriented and bother their neighbourhood, more serious it bites other people. Because of these reasons I think indoor playground is enough for them, not only protect their
safty
the state of being certain that adverse effects will not be caused by some agent under defined conditions
safety
 but
also
 the other people one.
On the other hand
, others think the owner should
taken
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take
 their
dog
 out for a walk once or twice a week. It is undeniable that, sunlight is extremely decisive for almost growth and no exceptions with their
dog
 so walking outside in the early morning will make them in a state of euphoria. In
conlusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
,
although
 I acknowledge both points of view, I do not think dogs should be held inside a
home
 against their will. I believe they are amazing being to help us tackle loneliness, but should not be a slave to serve our whims.
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