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New Homes Are Needed But The Only Space Available Is In The Countryside

#homes #space #countryside
Although
 the demand for housing is increasing, there is no open space available for their
construction
 except in the
countryside
.
However
, some people argue that the
countryside
 should be protected from
construction
 activity. I disagree with them. In my opinion, it is important to build homes on the outskirts of cities.
First
 and foremost, cities have become over crowded due to urbanization and free space is only available in the
countryside
. More and more people are migrating to cities for a better future and
hence
 the space available for
construction
 has already been used. To meet
this
 demand for land, people are turning to the
countryside
. Many customers
also
 want to buy homes in the
countryside
 because they are more affordable.
Also
, pollution is not really an issue in rural areas.
Hence
, people opting to live in the
countryside
 can buy spacious homes built amidst natural greenery.
In addition
 to
this
, if
construction
Suggestion
the construction
 is done in the areas away from the city we can reduce the negative effects of urbanization. Due to overcrowding in cities, people face not only traffic congestion but
also
 pollution.
For example
, in a South Indian city, a 40% improvement in air quality was observed after they started building homes in the peripheral areas of the city
instead
 of in the centre.
Thus
, to improve the quality of life in the urban area it is a better solution.
However
, there should be strict rules regarding the
construction
 of homes in the
countryside
. Homes should be built with proper ventilation and there should be vegetation zones and free spaces between houses to prevent the bad impact of
construction
 in those areas. In conclusion, as
population
Suggestion
the population
 is
continuously
seemingly without interruption
continually
 moving to cities for better prospects, there is a simultaneous increase in the demand for shelters.
Therefore
, the
countryside
 can be utilised for
this
 purpose and to curb the effects of overcrowding in cities.
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