Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. Why do think this is? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Immigration of the youth from the countryside to live in the
urbanism
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Urbanism
in a phenomenon in most developing countries. While
olding
(Norse mythology) ruler of the Aesir; supreme god of war and poetry and knowledge and wisdom (for which he gave an eye) and husband of Frigg; identified with the Teutonic Wotan
Odin
still
staying
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stays
in the rural.
Therefore
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,
tis
denotes a person or thing
this
offers a few advantages and
also
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some disadvantages which are worth considering. On one hand, there are two main benefits to leave the rural going to the cities.
Firstly
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, peoples always search for a good life with
educational
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education
, medical services and workable infrastructure.
In addition
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, they will be exposed to different customs
as a result
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, they will gain a deeper understanding of the world.
Secondly
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, increasing in urban population will have a
well
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good
effect on industrial sectors which need large numbers of
labors
someone who works with their hands; someone engaged in manual labor
labourers
.
On the other hand
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, various drawbacks may be noted. In the
first
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place, increasing urban population could cause bad in quality of life and services which citizens of urban are gaining and could
made
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make
society unstable in
social aspect
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a social aspect
the social aspect
.
Furthermore
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, the agricultural products will be
decreasing
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decreased
because
numbers
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the numbers
of peoples who working in
this
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field will be low when they going to towns and the old peoples couldn’t
affordable
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afford
the work of the land. In conclusion, economical and social are two important aspects of the development of a country in order to save the stability of the society.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
, the government should pay attention
of
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on
the negative
effectives
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
of immigration of the young peoples to urban.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • migration
  • economic opportunities
  • urban areas
  • rural industries
  • cultural heritage
  • overpopulation
  • infrastructure
  • healthcare facilities
  • educational institutions
  • neglect
  • workforce
  • traditional cultures
  • customs
  • pollution
  • support systems
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