It is more important for school children to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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History
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is the study of the past. It is the study of nations, battles, people and events. The study
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involves classroom learning and tutoring. With the advancement of technology, the
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has become a global village. It is
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vital for
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children
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especially to learn
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history
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. The
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is a beautiful place filled with people of diverse backgrounds. Learning about the
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of
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places and people is very important, especially for
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school
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schoolchildren
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children
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. The
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has become a small place with the
advanement
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advancement
of technology, a global village if you like. It is
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necessary for
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children
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to learn about the
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's
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instead
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of local
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. Education encourages migration, it is pertinent for
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children
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to learn the
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of the places they find themselves at all times.
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is evident in exchange programs between institutions of higher learning, students travel from their countries to other nations for the purpose of learning. Learning the
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of the places they travel to is of importance. Technology has made it
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for
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children
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to make friends overseas with the use of the internet, computers and the telephone. Interaction between friends from diverse backgrounds is
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made possible and easy. Learning about the
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of the
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translates to learning the
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of the countries of their friends from all over the
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. Local is small compared to
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history
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,
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is because learning the
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of the
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translates to learning
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history
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. Learning local
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however
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limits the knowledge gained by
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children
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. Learning
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world
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history
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therefore
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cannot be overemphasised.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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