There are people who suffer from poverty in every country. What do you think the reasons for poverty are in your country and what do you think can be done to help these impoverished people?

Many people are suffering from
poverty
all over the world.
Although
my country, Japan, is one of the world’s most developed and wealthiest countries, there are still many people who suffer from relative
poverty
.
This
is mainly because of academic background-oriented society and the increasing number of single-parent families.
However
, there are some solutions to prevent it.
Government
should focus on improving educational inequality and welfare system for single-parent families. In Japan, many people fall into
poverty
because they only have a low level of
education
. Without sufficient
education
, it is difficult to get a stable job, so they end up doing unstable jobs with low pay. High quality
education
,
such
as universities, in Japan is necessary to get a stable job,
however
, it is often extremely expensive and there are not many scholarships available.
Thus
, people who do not get into university tend to suffer from
poverty
. Another reason for
poverty
is an increase in single parents. The number of single-parent families are increasing in Japan, but they do not get enough financial assistance.
In addition
, it is difficult for single parents to get a full-time job, because they cannot work overtime. Most of them work harder, but they cannot make much money and receive only a small amount of financial support from the
government
.
Therefore
, single-mother families have to live in
poverty
. Owing to avoid
such
situations,
government
needs to work on correcting
education
gaps and providing more social support for single-parent families. People would go to college and earn more if the
government
or private sector set up more scholarship. The
government
also
should set some law so that the company hire more single mother.
In addition
, the
government
raises a child benefit payment. Those solutions would hopefully help poor getting out of
poverty
. In conclusion, concerning
poverty
in Japan, we need to provide various forms of social support to help people their own way out of their unfavourable state.
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