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With the development of technology and science, some people believe that there is no great value of artists such as musicians and painters. What are the things artists can do but the scientist cannot? Why should we encourage the art area?

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With advancement in science and technology, artisans are losing their value. No one is interested in attending live concerts as they can simply download or watch online videos on
you tube
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. No one is interested in
theater
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatre
. The power of live performances has been lost. Literature has been hugely impacted due to the availability of e books. It’s beneficial for the readers as digital technology has made books easily accessible to a greater number of
people but
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people, but
 it has made difficult for individuals and organizations to produce a sustainable amount of income. Digital technology and modern techniques have negatively influenced the
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 of painting and drawing. Now it doesn’t depend upon the artists’ skills anymore. Artists today, on the clicks of the mouse, video tools, and digital tools, can control the density of
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
, the degrees of different shades. That human touch is lost now. Live performances are losing their charm. While science can only explain why we feel,
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 conveys what we feel. Scientists can tell you why and how we feel emotions, which chemicals are released
etc but
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etc, but
 they
can not
can not
cannot
 make us feel those emotions. A poem, a painting, a song can make you shiver down your spine. While science can help us know,
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 can make us understand.
Art
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 has no limits. Why
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 and creativity are important? Because it helps in the mental, emotional, social development. Creativity helps you express yourself without hurting others.
Art
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 is a way to deal with emotions and feelings through music, paper,
colors
a flag that shows its nationality
colours
, photography which
can not
can not
cannot
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. It’s enjoyable, motivating and helps in developing positive attitudes towards life. Music helps us in forgetting all our worries and tensions and has
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 a soothing effect. These are some of the few reasons why we need to encourage the
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 area. It simply makes life beautiful.
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