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Some people believe that modern technology is increasing the gap between rixh and poor people, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is clear that the advancement of technology has revolutionized our lives in every aspect. While there are strong arguments that modern technology is widening the gap between different social classes, I am in favour of the opposite idea. On the one hand, there are several reasons for believing that the wealth inequality is growing. The principal reason is the automation. It is obvious that
as a result
 of the automation, driven by technology, the need for manual labour is dropping, leading to the dramatic decrease in the employment prospects for those who receive less chances of education.
In addition
, modern society puts people under a great strain to satisfy new basic needs.
For instance
, the connection to the Internet and smartphones are required for most people these days and the poor are no exception.
This
 appears to be a burden to the indigent as they have to work harder or even borrow money to cover
such
 needs.
On the other hand
, I agree with those who hold the opinion that the difference between the upper classes and lower classes is certainl

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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