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housing requirements have reached the skies, due to the increase in globalization

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As most of the big cities became the economical hub

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requires

certain

manpower

to provide the outcome. The housing

shortage

in big cities push many

company

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companies

rellocate

become established in a new location

relocate

to another

city

and push people to live in a unsanitary situation.

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can be tackled by the government intervention of providing multi storage accomodation and expanding the

city

to the remote areas

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with

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the consequences of these housing

shortage

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shortages

will have

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impact on the

economy

of the

city

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require

manpower

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these

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shortages

in the

manpower

will force the

investers

someone who commits capital in order to gain financial returns

investors

investor

to move to another

city

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diminishing the

economy

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a component that is added to something to improve it

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these housing

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shortages

will create slums and

unsanitory

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accomodation which spread deadly diseases to the

city

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phenomena

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governments

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government

government's

intervention on the building multi storage building

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it can retain the required

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city

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economy

of society

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Chennai municipality has solved the housing problems by creating a new industrial

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area

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