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Many students decide to further their study abroad what are the benefits and drawbacks of studying abroad. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays
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 the number of students are studying abroad to develop their knowledge in their courses. Beside,
such
 students think that it brings many benefits in order to them and
further
 work, when they finished
a
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an
 education of overseas university. It could quite natural impact that get different backgrounds to compare with studying in the other country and their motherlands.
To begin
 with, the common reason about avoiding to
study
 abroad, that
usually mention
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usually mentions
 it, living far away from home
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 students generally suffer from loneliness and homesickness. Overseas students
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 they are sometimes disoriented and depressed for lack of adequate acknowledge and understanding of local culture or custom and so on.
This
 means, it
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might become
 losing of time more than studying in their national university. On the other view
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some
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Some
 other students hold a different attitude, debating that students should go abroad to
study
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 The reason why they can get a chance to experience a totally different culture.
Also they
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Also, they
 acquired in the other countries that help them to become more open minded and bring various education way as get wide perspectives. In conclusion
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 it is undoubtedly looked some advantages and disadvantages
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of
study
 in abroad and their countries.
However
, In fact , I would like to say that even though it has been mentioned reasonable each opinions among many people, it can not persuade to students have to receive
further
study
 overseas because it depends on how students to accept the different education and staying in other country without any problem from their situations in individuals
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