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Science will soon make people live up to 100 years or even 200 years. Some believe this is a good thing while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#science #people #years #believe
in
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In
 the mid 20s
,
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,
science
 has been viewed as the significant impact
in
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on
humanity assuming
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humanity, assuming
 control over the world, that the world is no more observed as a worldwide
town
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town, however
however
 having the effect of knowledge of
man
 and innovation through imagination and advancement from various thoughts of
man
.
individuals
Suggestion
Individuals
 have had the option to make logical gear's where has been steady to make things simpler and quicker,
for example
, the web, media communications, PC, programs
,
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,
 and different type of mechanical materials.
for
Suggestion
For
 instance, a
man
 who is in one nation can know precisely what's going on in another
nation even
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nation, even
 without
been there having
Suggestion
has there had
being there having
have there had
 the correct data's and information through the assistance of the web.
people
Suggestion
People
 have developed to the degree of musings in which they accept with the assistance of some specialized frill
such
 in line of the
restorative
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restoration
 field
,
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,
 hardware are
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 made to make
man
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man's
life
 considerably in excess of a 100years or even 200years.
for
Suggestion
For
 instance, a real existence
bolster
Suggestion
bolsters
 machine in the emergency clinic have had the option to help individuals live in excess of a specific
time notwithstanding
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time, notwithstanding
 when due for them to live
,
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,
 generally some trust is anything but something worth being thankful for in light of the fact that it doesn't give
man
Suggestion
a man
the man
 the correct vitality and
life
 back in which the body need to get by for a specific period.
taking
Suggestion
Taking
 everything into account,
science
 has turned into something to be thankful for
to
Suggestion
in
 the
world yet
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world, yet
 has in different ways made
man
 lethargic
however
 supportive.
science
a particular branch of scientific knowledge
Science
 will before long make individuals
satisfy
Suggestion
are satisfying
 100years or even 200years in light of the fact that with the assistance of
science
,
Accept space
,
 there is a lesser pressure include in the
life
 of a
man
 and which
man
 can almost certainly live long, yet
in addition
, if the body of a
man
 isn't
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 practiced appropriately,
this
 can lead maturity sooner than anticipated.
as
Suggestion
As
 I would like to think,
science
 ought not be taken completely in the
life
 of a
man
 since its in part supportive to the
life
 expectancy of a
man
.

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