The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
The table shows
information
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the information
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on the underground
railway
systems
, the year the
railway
systems
was
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were
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initiated and the
number
of
people
travelling per year for six cities. Generally, London has the longest route and it becomes one of the oldest underground
railway
systems
.
On the other hand
, Los Angles still gains less popularity and it is the latest as it opened
since
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2001 and covers the
second
least
railway
route
of
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28 km. As is presented in the table,
Tokyo
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the Tokyo
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railway
service had the largest
number
of passengers which controlled a large share with about 1927
million
people
annually in 1927. Unlike other
railway
services, Kyoto consists of the least
number
of
travelers
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travellers
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with only 45
million
people
. Paris and Tokyo are alike
that
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they both are very popular and the
number
of
people
visiting them
are
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more than other
railway
systems
. London and Paris are 775
million
passengers and 1191
million
people
respectively whilst Washington DC
constitute
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constitutes
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for
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about 144
million
passengers each year.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, systems, number, people, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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